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我下一篇演讲的第一版。《Touch - 从我做起,从现在做起》,需要你的帮助!很多话,包括标题,我都不能用恰当的英文表达。在进化到最后一个版本的过程中,我需要你。记住这篇演讲的要求“要求用Vivid Words,用到各种声音技巧,用明喻,隐喻,押韵,排比句。”

本文发表在 rolia.net 枫下论坛[0’]
Touch – Start From Me Fo It Now(?)

What is touch

Like an old song Memory sings,

Touch me
If you touch me
You'll understand what happiness is

(其实这个地方我想说接触,触摸,但是很蹩脚)
We have been touched many times in our lives. I was often touched by my parents and many other people when I was a baby. They touched me because they loved me and they felt happy when they touched me.

(这时我想把感动的意思表达出来。被电影里的英雄感动,这个例子好像不好。)
The first time in my memory I was touched was when I watched a typical movie about war that bad guy was killed and our people got saved. I cried. I loved our people and they through the movie touched my heart.

(这个地方我就想把接触,把爱,把感动交织在一起)
Just like the teenagers and young guys, tehy do not care too much about others, I did not touch other people for many years. Until that day my first baby arrived, I touched her, and I was touched. Touch came back, and at that moment I know what happiness was. I felt happy, because of love.
(其实,这里可以用很多修饰,比如排比,比如“I felt happy”可以加很多vivic修饰词表达怎么个happy法,比方无以伦比的happy等,俺功底太差,大家帮我吧。)

Touch is good, but we do not have enough.

(下边我想讲几个日常生活里常见的人们之间熟视无睹的,其实是漠不关心的例子)
New comers do not know how to cook Canadian food. My daughter is in grade 5 now, but I still do not know whether the lunch we make for her looks strange or not. she seldom complained but occasionally she said that our way making food was weird. Other kids never put tuna fish and ham in one sandwich, that is way disgusting. She likes burgers, then finally we made burgers, she eat a lot, but one day I heard from her that no other kid brought burger to school.

I need somebody to touch me and explain me and teach me how to cook Canadian food.

Seniors in senior centre are bored. We should go there and talk to them or have a small party, or even to setuo a daycare in each and every senior centre, so they do not feel lonely. By doing that, kids, their parents and seniors mix together, they have opportunity to tough each other.

(下边这些内容也应该比较容易用排比啊,押韵啊,头韵啊等手法,可惜俺不会,俺想跟你学)
Who need money but do not have enough? Young parents! Their career just get started, they need to pay mortgage for car and house. They need money NOW for everything but 20 years later when the kids can make money, mortgage get paid off, and their salaries increased, they will have a lot of money buy they do not feel the need of much money anymore. They can loan today when they are young but they have fears as they do not know how much in the future they can make. So young parents are usually thrifty.

Touch them by giving them a used Halloween costume, used blade, clothes…

Give some young colleagues a lift on your way home.

Volunteer at school or in community

Help understand cultures


Great Touch
Talking about culture, I recalled the 29th Olympics, the opening ceremony is so fascinating, embedded a lot of Chinese culture. I was touched. It was a window they know Chinese culture. Like the theme song sings, You and Me, From One World, We are Family. We touch each other, we can live with harmony without war. The war movie ever touched me but now it still touches me in the sense I hope there is no war.

The American big movies touched me by the scenes like shooting, killing but now it touches me in the sense that I want no killing.

Touches that We can Do
Back to our daily lives, our community, we can touch people. I got touched by you guys here from the first day I joined. All of you talked to me even you know I might not be able to respond because sometimes I do not quite get you. but you touch me, that encouraged me.

As time goes by, people may have conflicts, retouch is necessary, show you care you love. Can you touch people surrounding you?

We might go to school and open a toastmaster session for kids. Or go to the senior centres and open a session there.

We can ask each other how are you. by how are you I mean I want to know how are you without disguise. Share your headache, your trouble, your happy.

Let’s tough. From your hand, you heart, I know you were beautiful then, you had happiness, and I am happy and I hope you are happy by touching me.

I love you.
(后半部分就是列出些要点,还不知道怎么进展,怎么取舍)
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  • 工作学习 / 外语学习 / 【英文演讲】我要准备下一篇演讲了,要求用Vivid Words,用到各种声音技巧,用明喻,隐喻,押韵,排比句。以前俺列出一大堆演讲题目,大家看哪个题目能用这些技巧?---- 希望在Rolia形成一个人人演讲的热潮。
    • (+4820088@0),以前探讨过的《共鸣》,是否可以满足这些条件呢?
    • 或者《感动 -- 从我做起,从现在做起》,这些英文都怎么翻译呢?
      • 如果我讲这个Topic,可能我会从音乐剧《猫》里那首感人的歌曲《Memory》开始,从Touch me, If you touch me, You'll understand what happiness is,引到让人感动的北京奥运会,再回归到日常琐事中的感动。
        在接触和感动两层意思里游离交错。得出结论,这个社会需要更多的感动,从我做起,从现在做起。

        大家快贡献描述这些事情的,符合演讲条件的英文词藻和句型啊。
    • 英文很烂的人怎样完成一篇演讲?目前为止,3篇演讲我都挺满意的。我认为最好的是第一篇《My Dreams and I》,不过个人信息太多,不便于发表。水平相当的是《Laughter - Yoga Way And Your Way》。第三篇《Leadership Skills》完全是突然遇到Production问题,根本没时间,
      只好找个容易的话题。不过,对我的英文能力来说,这篇也算可以了。唯一遗憾的是真的没有时间演练了,结果演讲时完全没有自信。

      回到这个问题:英文很烂的人怎样完成一篇演讲?我通常会在睇 到第7个版本定稿。第一稿基本上是很烂的,也不知道自己要说什么,也不知道怎么说。除了电脑英语,我对其它任何英语都不在行。

      可是我愿意和大家分享我从第一版到定稿的全过程。老实说,会是个出丑的过程。不过,我相信只有这样,你才能帮我。从帮我出个主意,到帮我改一个句子。我需要你的帮助。同时,如果你从我的版本进化中,能找到一点信心,那我也挺为你高兴的。咱们需要这样一个风气。

      另外,我想说,在我一遍一遍写,改,演练和推敲的过程中,其实我英文口语已经有些进步了。尽管还是很烂,可是,我今天比我昨天好,我明天比我今天好,我就挺满足的。直到有一天,我不再被语言牵制,生活在这个地方,才会有灵气。
      • 我下一篇演讲的第一版。《Touch - 从我做起,从现在做起》,需要你的帮助!很多话,包括标题,我都不能用恰当的英文表达。在进化到最后一个版本的过程中,我需要你。记住这篇演讲的要求“要求用Vivid Words,用到各种声音技巧,用明喻,隐喻,押韵,排比句。”
        本文发表在 rolia.net 枫下论坛[0’]
        Touch – Start From Me Fo It Now(?)

        What is touch

        Like an old song Memory sings,

        Touch me
        If you touch me
        You'll understand what happiness is

        (其实这个地方我想说接触,触摸,但是很蹩脚)
        We have been touched many times in our lives. I was often touched by my parents and many other people when I was a baby. They touched me because they loved me and they felt happy when they touched me.

        (这时我想把感动的意思表达出来。被电影里的英雄感动,这个例子好像不好。)
        The first time in my memory I was touched was when I watched a typical movie about war that bad guy was killed and our people got saved. I cried. I loved our people and they through the movie touched my heart.

        (这个地方我就想把接触,把爱,把感动交织在一起)
        Just like the teenagers and young guys, tehy do not care too much about others, I did not touch other people for many years. Until that day my first baby arrived, I touched her, and I was touched. Touch came back, and at that moment I know what happiness was. I felt happy, because of love.
        (其实,这里可以用很多修饰,比如排比,比如“I felt happy”可以加很多vivic修饰词表达怎么个happy法,比方无以伦比的happy等,俺功底太差,大家帮我吧。)

        Touch is good, but we do not have enough.

        (下边我想讲几个日常生活里常见的人们之间熟视无睹的,其实是漠不关心的例子)
        New comers do not know how to cook Canadian food. My daughter is in grade 5 now, but I still do not know whether the lunch we make for her looks strange or not. she seldom complained but occasionally she said that our way making food was weird. Other kids never put tuna fish and ham in one sandwich, that is way disgusting. She likes burgers, then finally we made burgers, she eat a lot, but one day I heard from her that no other kid brought burger to school.

        I need somebody to touch me and explain me and teach me how to cook Canadian food.

        Seniors in senior centre are bored. We should go there and talk to them or have a small party, or even to setuo a daycare in each and every senior centre, so they do not feel lonely. By doing that, kids, their parents and seniors mix together, they have opportunity to tough each other.

        (下边这些内容也应该比较容易用排比啊,押韵啊,头韵啊等手法,可惜俺不会,俺想跟你学)
        Who need money but do not have enough? Young parents! Their career just get started, they need to pay mortgage for car and house. They need money NOW for everything but 20 years later when the kids can make money, mortgage get paid off, and their salaries increased, they will have a lot of money buy they do not feel the need of much money anymore. They can loan today when they are young but they have fears as they do not know how much in the future they can make. So young parents are usually thrifty.

        Touch them by giving them a used Halloween costume, used blade, clothes…

        Give some young colleagues a lift on your way home.

        Volunteer at school or in community

        Help understand cultures


        Great Touch
        Talking about culture, I recalled the 29th Olympics, the opening ceremony is so fascinating, embedded a lot of Chinese culture. I was touched. It was a window they know Chinese culture. Like the theme song sings, You and Me, From One World, We are Family. We touch each other, we can live with harmony without war. The war movie ever touched me but now it still touches me in the sense I hope there is no war.

        The American big movies touched me by the scenes like shooting, killing but now it touches me in the sense that I want no killing.

        Touches that We can Do
        Back to our daily lives, our community, we can touch people. I got touched by you guys here from the first day I joined. All of you talked to me even you know I might not be able to respond because sometimes I do not quite get you. but you touch me, that encouraged me.

        As time goes by, people may have conflicts, retouch is necessary, show you care you love. Can you touch people surrounding you?

        We might go to school and open a toastmaster session for kids. Or go to the senior centres and open a session there.

        We can ask each other how are you. by how are you I mean I want to know how are you without disguise. Share your headache, your trouble, your happy.

        Let’s tough. From your hand, you heart, I know you were beautiful then, you had happiness, and I am happy and I hope you are happy by touching me.

        I love you.
        (后半部分就是列出些要点,还不知道怎么进展,怎么取舍)
        [7’]更多精彩文章及讨论,请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net
        • start with U2, " Hold Me, Thrill Me, Kiss Me, Kill Me", add to it with "TOUCH ME" .... I bet you would grab everyone's attention. Good luck. :))
          • 那样太急了。其实,我有得是耐心,去等待一种英语学习或者英文演讲的气候在Rolia的形成。大家互相帮助。
            • 天哪, 先弄懂英文愿意,再touch吧。 你写的那些 touch, 估计当地人听了,会无比惊诧!
              • 你是指接触和感动交织吗?有接触才能感动,这个是我想提倡的。我们希望生活中有感动,但是我们却没有跟人接触,不了解别人,这样如何才能制作或者碰到感动的事情呢?俺就是想借用这个词的双重意思,把他们交织在一起,双关一下。
                • to keep in touch is not touch; to touch you is caressing you, something that is done to each other between lovers.
                  • 如果只是表达中文“接触”的意思,该用哪个词呢?中文这个接触也有物理接触和联系的双重意思。
                    • 你这样不行。 要直接用英文来思考和表达,而不是用中文来想,然后直直的返成英文, 这样一来会闹笑话的。
                      • 嗯,这就是我为什么要来这里,大家探讨可以有个很好的氛围。
                        • whatever, I'd better shut up tonight.
                      • I guess what you intend to talk about is to reach out to others proactively, to help others. So, do not touch other people, that behaviour could be called harassment.
                        • 差不多是这样,不过我要谈的是去接触别人,才有感动。
                          • open your heart, you will be touched by so many tiny little things happening everyday in this world.
                    • to socialize is not to touch someone. if you are moved by some spirits or stories, then you may say they touched your heart. To learn more about somebody, to know them better, to make friends, to keep in touch with them... that is your social life.
                      • 其实很多思考都是来自于音乐剧《猫》里的歌曲《Memory》。这个孤独的老人,被年轻人遗忘,人们看也不愿意看她一眼,碰也不愿意碰她一下。结果她这样唱:Touch me,If you touch me,You'll understand what happiness is。
                        大家都去触碰她,然后大家接受她,理解她。然后这个老人被感动了,这群年轻人被感动了,观众也被感动了。感动,来源于一个接触,一次触碰。
                        • Oh, God. That is art, not in reality. That touch is like a symbol, that implies that you should not ignore a person, if you reach out to someone, are willing to learn about them ... to help out ... to respect...
                          then you will feel rewarded by the smiles on their faces, feel the human spirits, the support and love among people...

                          I really should stop dragging it now. good luck.
                          • 没关系的,其实你提了一个很好的问题,我去找我的Mentor研究一下,既然是有多重意思的一个词,避免尴尬的确是应该考虑的,你要是不提出来,我被人家笑死了都不知道。
                            • 看来我真实白费了一番口舌, 真是多余。
        • 这首歌结尾处,她让大家Touch她,她这样唱(歌词见内)了后,小猫们一个一个去触碰她,那段是个融合,和谐的开始。遗憾Youtube里没有这一段,否则这是个很好的对Touch的解释。
          。。。。。。

          Touch me
          It's so easy to leave me
          All alone with the memory
          Of my days in the sun
          If you touch me
          You'll understand what happiness is

          Look
          A new day has begun

    • 要求太高了,中文俺都写不出来。现在只会写没有感情色彩朴实逻辑性的专业报告,想想真没劲
      • 我跟你一样啊,都愁得慌。不过,逼到头上了,做吧。你也开始吧。
        • 不一样吧,您老感情丰富多了,还有表演天才;我早就麻木不仁了,嘿嘿
    • x888大虾,我PM了您,请您查收并给予指导。谢谢!