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本文发表在 rolia.net 枫下论坛庞德(Ezra Pound)原文
In a Station of the Metro
The apparition of these faces in the crowd;
Petals on a wet, black bough.

　　
诸种译文：
1.在地铁站
人潮中这些面容的忽现；
湿巴巴的黑树丫上的花瓣。（罗池）

　　
2．地下车站
人群中幻影般浮现的脸
潮湿的，黑色树枝上的花瓣（钟鲲）

　　
3．地铁车站
人群中这些脸庞的幻影；
潮湿又黑的树枝上的花瓣.（成婴）

　　
4．在伦敦的地铁车站里
这些脸的幻影在人群中，
一条潮湿的、黑色枝干上的点点花瓣。（李德武）

　　
5．地铁车站
人群中这些面庞的闪现；
湿漉的黑树干上的花瓣。（赵毅衡）

　　
6．在地铁车站
这几张脸在人群中幻景般闪现；
湿漉漉的黑树枝上花瓣数点。（飞白）

　　
7．地铁车站
人群里忽隐忽现的张张面庞，
黝黑沾湿枝头的点点花瓣。
又：
人群中这些脸庞的隐现；
湿漉漉、黑黝黝的树枝上的花瓣。（裘小龙）

　　
8．在一个地铁车站
人群中这些面孔幽灵一般显现；
湿漉漉的黑色枝条上的许多花瓣
又：地铁车站
人群中这些面孔幽灵般显现；
湿漉漉的黑枝条上朵朵花瓣。（杜运燮）

　　
9．地铁站里
出现在人群里这一张张面孔；
湿的黑树枝上的一片片花瓣。（张子清）

　　
10．在一个地铁车站
这些面孔似幻象在人群中显现；
一串花瓣在潮湿的黑色枝干上。（江枫）

　　
11．地铁站上
这些面庞从人群中涌现
湿漉漉的黑树干上花瓣朵朵（郑敏）

　　
12. 人群里这些脸忽然闪现；
花丛在一条湿黑的树枝。（流沙河）

　　
13. 人群中，这些面孔的鬼影；
潮湿的黑树枝上的花瓣。（余光中）

　　
14. 人群中千张脸空的魅影；
一条湿而黑的树枝上的花瓣。（洛夫）

　　
15. 这些面孔浮现于人群；
花瓣潮湿的黑树枝（颜元叔）

　　
16. 在群众中这些脸的魅影；
花瓣在一根濡湿的辚树丫上（李英豪）

　　
17. 在这拥挤的人群里这个美貌的突现；
一如花瓣在潮湿里，如暗淡的树枝（周伯乃）

18.
人群粉面幽灵
黝湿枝头花瓣更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net

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抢沙发 -pituoxie(皮皮); 2010-3-28 (#5975320@0)

Concubine beginning of follow-up the amount of hair, folded flowers in front of theater. Lang riding a bamboo horse come around the bed get ome ---from google translate... -icyice(ice); 2010-3-28 (#5976045@0)

好，那我就不客气了：That year when I just got enough hair to cover my forhead(geez..this girl must've got a big forehead..) -fatbean(think open a little); 2010-3-29 {411} (#5977810@0)

I often played with flowers in front my house..and he came. He came riding a horse made of sticks, we played in my bedroom......

Seasons came and changed the time
When I grew up, I called him mine
He would always laugh and say
"Remember when we used to play?"
.....

Now he's gone, I don't know why
And till this day, sometimes I cry
He didn't even say goodbye
He didn't take the time to lie.

we played in my bedroom......wah -w4b(Watch for Beauty); 2010-3-29 (#5977972@0)

Man,this is pure friendship..I guess you can't even call it puppy love since they hadn't even reached their puberty yet...It's until many years later they realized what they felt for each other....alright, now I'm not translating..I'm creating... -fatbean(think open a little); 2010-3-30 (#5978869@0)

从书上抄的 -- -youbet(寻常巷陌); 2010-3-30 {185} (#5980772@0)

My forehead covered by my hair cut straight,
I played with flowers pluck'd before the gate.
On a hobby-horse you came on the scene,
Around the well we played with mumes still green.

嗯， Around the well 比 played in my bedroom 好看多了。。。“（注 3）床，是指井床，即井的围栏。 “ -w4b(Watch for Beauty); 2010-3-30 (#5980960@0)

之前看到网上关于马未都对古诗中“床”的解释，他认为床指胡床，即马扎。不过我倒觉得井床更有意境，例如“床前明月光” 反正此床不是“BED" :P -icyice(ice); 2010-3-31 (#5983331@0)

i still try to find best one and thank you very much. -urchin(urchin); 2010-3-30 (#5980831@0)

想干嘛？大概齐意思翻出来就行了，没有人能翻出来每句5个音节、而且还平仄平仄原样不变的，所以毛主席教导我们说：师不可译 -w4b(Watch for Beauty); 2010-3-30 (#5980968@0)
名人名家。。。 -nicotine(2012); 2010-3-30 {2053} (#5980996@0)
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李白
妾发初覆额，折花门前剧。
郎骑竹马来，绕床弄青梅。
同居长干里，两小无嫌猜。
十四为君妇，羞颜未尝开。
低头向暗壁，千唤不一回。
十五始展眉，愿同尘与灰。
常存抱柱信，岂上望夫台。
十六君远行，瞿塘滟滪堆。
五月不可触，猿鸣天上哀。
门前迟行迹，一一生绿苔。
苔深不能扫，落叶秋风早。
八月蝴蝶来，双飞西园草。
感此伤妾心，坐愁红颜老。
早晚下三巴，预将书报家。
相迎不道远，直至长风沙。

The River-Merchant's－Wife:A letter

Ezra Pound

While my hair was still cut straight across my forehead

I played about the front gate, pulling flowers.

You came by on bamboo stilts, playing horse,

You walked about my seat, playing with blue plums.

And we went on living in the village of Chokan:

Two smallpeople,without dislike or suspicion.

At fourteen I married My Lord you.

I never laughed, being bashful.

Lowering my head, I looked at the wall.

Called to, a thousand times, I never looked back.

At fifteen I stopped scowling,

I desired my dust to be mingled with yours Forever and forever and forever.

Why should I climb the look out?

At sixteen you departed, You went into far Ku-to-en,

by the river of swirling eddies, And you have been gone five months.

The monkeys make sorrowful noise overhead.

You dragged your feet when you went out.

By the gate now, the moss is grown, the different mosses,

Too deep to clear them away!

The leaves fall early this autumn, in wind.

The paired butterflies are already yellow with August Over the grass in the West garden;

They hurt me.

I grow older.

If you are coming down through the narrows of the river Kiang,

Please let me know beforehand,

And I will come out to meet you As far as Cho-fu-Sa.

Ezra Pound（1885－1972），具有世界影响的诗人、翻译家。他早期创作的意象派诗歌风格清新、文字瑰丽，成为一代先驱。出于对东方文化的热爱，他对李白、李清照和陶渊明等大诗人的诗作进行了翻译与再创作，使中国优秀的诗歌作品登上了世界诗坛。他政治上比较反动，曾极力为法西斯摇旗呐喊。二战后备美国法庭定为判国罪，后因精神失常而终止了创作更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net

对对对，庞德，他的名诗《地铁车站》名家中译文是这样的：“人群中这些面孔幽灵一般显现 / 湿漉漉的黑色枝条上的许多花瓣 ”—— 全诗就这两行，中文长了很多 -w4b(Watch for Beauty); 2010-3-31 {135} (#5981010@0)
原文：
In a Station of the Metro

The apparition of these faces in the crowd;
petals on a wet, black bough.

杜运燮译

and 此诗的20种译文。说明了：诗不可译 -w4b(Watch for Beauty); 2010-3-31 {1724} (#5981014@0)
本文发表在 rolia.net 枫下论坛庞德(Ezra Pound)原文
In a Station of the Metro
The apparition of these faces in the crowd;
Petals on a wet, black bough.

　　
诸种译文：
1.在地铁站
人潮中这些面容的忽现；
湿巴巴的黑树丫上的花瓣。（罗池）

　　
2．地下车站
人群中幻影般浮现的脸
潮湿的，黑色树枝上的花瓣（钟鲲）

　　
3．地铁车站
人群中这些脸庞的幻影；
潮湿又黑的树枝上的花瓣.（成婴）

　　
4．在伦敦的地铁车站里
这些脸的幻影在人群中，
一条潮湿的、黑色枝干上的点点花瓣。（李德武）

　　
5．地铁车站
人群中这些面庞的闪现；
湿漉的黑树干上的花瓣。（赵毅衡）

　　
6．在地铁车站
这几张脸在人群中幻景般闪现；
湿漉漉的黑树枝上花瓣数点。（飞白）

　　
7．地铁车站
人群里忽隐忽现的张张面庞，
黝黑沾湿枝头的点点花瓣。
又：
人群中这些脸庞的隐现；
湿漉漉、黑黝黝的树枝上的花瓣。（裘小龙）

　　
8．在一个地铁车站
人群中这些面孔幽灵一般显现；
湿漉漉的黑色枝条上的许多花瓣
又：地铁车站
人群中这些面孔幽灵般显现；
湿漉漉的黑枝条上朵朵花瓣。（杜运燮）

　　
9．地铁站里
出现在人群里这一张张面孔；
湿的黑树枝上的一片片花瓣。（张子清）

　　
10．在一个地铁车站
这些面孔似幻象在人群中显现；
一串花瓣在潮湿的黑色枝干上。（江枫）

　　
11．地铁站上
这些面庞从人群中涌现
湿漉漉的黑树干上花瓣朵朵（郑敏）

　　
12. 人群里这些脸忽然闪现；
花丛在一条湿黑的树枝。（流沙河）

　　
13. 人群中，这些面孔的鬼影；
潮湿的黑树枝上的花瓣。（余光中）

　　
14. 人群中千张脸空的魅影；
一条湿而黑的树枝上的花瓣。（洛夫）

　　
15. 这些面孔浮现于人群；
花瓣潮湿的黑树枝（颜元叔）

　　
16. 在群众中这些脸的魅影；
花瓣在一根濡湿的辚树丫上（李英豪）

　　
17. 在这拥挤的人群里这个美貌的突现；
一如花瓣在潮湿里，如暗淡的树枝（周伯乃）

18.
人群粉面幽灵
黝湿枝头花瓣更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net
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另一版本。。。觉得都没有楼上fatbean翻的好。。。 -nicotine(2012); 2010-3-31 {1595} (#5981016@0)
本文发表在 rolia.net 枫下论坛Folk-song-styled-verse

Li Bai

A SONG OF CHANGGAN

My hair had hardly covered my forehead.
I was picking flowers, paying by my door,
When you, my lover, on a bamboo horse,
Came trotting in circles and throwing green plums.
We lived near together on a lane in Ch'ang-kan,
Both of us young and happy-hearted.
...At fourteen I became your wife,
So bashful that I dared not smile,
And I lowered my head toward a dark corner
And would not turn to your thousand calls;
But at fifteen I straightened my brows and laughed,
Learning that no dust could ever seal our love,
That even unto death I would await you by my post
And would never lose heart in the tower of silent watching.
...Then when I was sixteen, you left on a long journey
Through the Gorges of Ch'u-t'ang, of rock and whirling water.
And then came the Fifth-month, more than I could bear,
And I tried to hear the monkeys in your lofty far-off sky.
Your footprints by our door, where I had watched you go,
Were hidden, every one of them, under green moss,
Hidden under moss too deep to sweep away.
And the first autumn wind added fallen leaves.
And now, in the Eighth-month, yellowing butterflies
Hover, two by two, in our west-garden grasses
And, because of all this, my heart is breaking
And I fear for my bright cheeks, lest they fade.
...Oh, at last, when you return through the three Pa districts,
Send me a message home ahead!
And I will come and meet you and will never mind the distance,
All the way to Chang-feng Sha.

From Witter Bynner's The Jade Mountain更多精彩文章及讨论，请光临枫下论坛 rolia.net

妾字不好翻译啊 -urchin(urchin); 2010-4-2 (#5986331@0)

对照中文的英文试译 -miaoyu(妙毓); 2010-3-31 {345} (#5983510@0)

妾的头发刚刚覆盖前额的时候，
在门前折花时遇有困难；
恰逢你骑着竹马来到，
绕着井上围栏用竹杆（所骑竹马）为我设法取得青梅。

in the bloom of youth, my hair hardly covers forehead
flowers on the low branch of a tree are too high to reach
while you are on a horse coming around the well fence
hand me the greengage plum with your bamboo cane

妾字不好翻译啊 -urchin(urchin); 2010-4-2 (#5986357@0)

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