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工作学习 / 外语学习 / 我的信用卡被别人盗用，然后信用被破坏，我讨还了公道，，，对此我写了一个感谢信，憋了我3个小时，，，应该是比较完美了，，请大家挑挑语法毛病，呵呵
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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too long ... 3hr hrs work is in vain with no spell check: I whish you and her the best!
-ra_95(小人*无聊一族);
2007-1-14
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something is better than nothing,,,也许是长了点，但是三个小时写信总比三个小时打麻将好吧？？，，最重要的是：一年前我根本不会用英文对话和写信，虽然这个信很多格式是盗用报纸上的文章，坚持下去！！
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
(#3431382@0)
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Sry. I mean, you should always use spell-check tool.
-ra_95(小人*无聊一族);
2007-1-14
(#3431512@0)
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靠记忆，不靠工具，，大学的写作考试不可以有字典的，，，怕丢脸就不学英文了，，，有错误你直接指出，尤其是我的文章有哪些一看就是“中国”英文的部分，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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I whish you and her the best!
-ra_95(小人*无聊一族);
2007-1-14
(#3431818@0)
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一个老外已经给我指出来了，，，看来很明显，他给我的其他建议还有5个左右，都很精辟，都是我的致命错误，，，，他对我的拼写没说什么，也许是我的缺点太多，他不想都说？呵呵，，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
(#3432104@0)
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小人*无聊一族 is right, way too long. Everyone in Canada is busy and nobody has much time to read through.
-geoguy(morale_was_up);
2007-1-14
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语法等词语用法有没有致命缺点？文章最大的语病问题是？？文章太长不属于语法范围内，，过几天我让一个鬼子看看，也许他们会找出来我的语法错误，，，在这里估计是没指望了，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
(#3431389@0)
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that happened to my Master card ((#****************） in November 2003.?2003?
-buma(buma);
2007-1-14
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MARSTER 密码删除，所以时间也错了，，我疏忽了，，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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语法、拼写错得还真是不一般的少，先用用拼写检查吧。
-sabrina2008(平淡最真);
2007-1-14
(#3431446@0)
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具体是？？？比如说，，，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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自己贴到word里查去, 你这人还真拽.
-001isbetter(001-is-better);
2007-1-14
(#3431517@0)
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我最关心的语法，结构错误，，，比如说：我的某个句子属于中国方式，表达方式很奇怪，，本地人不用这样的方式表达，，比如说类似：“你地良心，大大的坏了”这样的错误，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
(#3431539@0)
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拽是什么意思？这里英文比我好的不止一万个，，，，我的写作最差，比小学生都不如，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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对于一篇对外的正式信函，应该确保没有太多拼写错误。像你这样，明显是对对方的不尊重。
-littlebears(此熊非彼熊);
2007-1-14
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对！好意见，，，给我时间，我会初步改善，，，写作我一直很头疼，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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you have already tried very hard. take it easy, don't give yourself hard time.
-spruce(toaster master);
2007-1-19
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写的很好，积极提高，向你学习
-zhswl(带孩子真不容易);
2007-1-14
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我的学习方法都是机械的模仿英文电视对话，反复苦练写作，，把错误都公开，被人挖苦都不在乎，，，这个方法太苯，效率也不高，要是有“速成”，“突击”的英文学习方法就好了，，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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啊，你是那个倡导学习“friends”的朋友
-zhswl(带孩子真不容易);
2007-1-14
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是啊，，说和写作是我的薄弱环节，至今我仍然在改进中，，，写作好象很难改进，，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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我最自豪的成就就是在LINC4级水平，论坛里硕士，博士一堆啊，，，向我学习你真是要上当了，，呵呵，，不过每天在英文上花的时间我也许是这里最多了，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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If I were her supervisor, I won't appreciate her "plenty of time" spent on this. If I were her, I would worry a little bit about any negitive effect from this thanks letter especially if I were a new comer.
-subpena(往滋润了混);
2007-1-14
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确实是这样，他们两个销售人员，我对其中一个不满意，，另外一个很赞扬，，，我的文章已经尽量很隐晦了，，下次我继续改动一下口气，但是涉及到文化的东西，我能力不够啊，，
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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不会用拼写检查的干活？ 来来， 让有点软给你评分,看看你有多少错误！
-littlebears(此熊非彼熊);
2007-1-14
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下次我还是不用字典检查，！分数肯定会66分！！一定改正！！。。。感觉从报纸文章等偷学语法还是不错，至今没有人给我提出语法，结构的错误，，，看来我的毛病集中在词汇上，语法没什么问题
-hpibmcanada(unix);
2007-1-14
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lol
-fatbean(ReadingInMyLair);
2007-1-15
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It is NOT a thanks letter for real experience. It looks like a case writing exercise. As an writing exercise, it is not too bad except too many spelling errors.You were not clear what you would like to appreciate. You do not know how banks solve this kind of issues. You used your rich imagination. So some of your sentences were weird. e.g. Then I found the only very reason was ...;The thing was draging on almost for four months. I can imagine she had spent tremendous time on solving my problem. ... I do not think that recipients would be grateful when they read your letter.
-icebt(crystal);
2007-1-14
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Generally speaking thanks letter or such type of writing needs facts to support the conclusion or statement. To be precise and articulate will be helpful.
-webbwebb(rr_rolia);
2007-1-15
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我帮你指出了比较普遍的问题，希望会有帮助。有些中国式的表达如果不影响理解我就不指出了。你的精神很可嘉，我需要好好向你学习。
-aha(aha);
2007-1-16
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佩服
-sapple(似水流年);
2007-1-20
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很多人已指出了语法和拼写的问题，我不重复。您指的几点也在理，这里从文体的角度入手，用自己当年英文文体课和翻译课学到的皮毛，再以第一段的某句为例补评一句。楼主的精神值得鼓励。
-wolke(云之南);
2007-1-21
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所言即是。简洁其实是一个很高的要求，即使是native speaker，很多人也做不到。
-aha(aha);
2007-1-21
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I quickly phoned the BMO legal department several times and left my detailed message at the number 416-237-5222I quickly phoned the BMO legal department several times ---- can you phone quickly SEVERAL times? i think that you can only phone them quickly at the first time.
left my detailed message at the number 416-237-5222 -- i would recommend you don't use the number before 416.... . this sentence can be shorten to left my message at 416-237....
-spruce(toaster master);
2007-1-19
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I am writing to you to express my great thanks to Ms. Noshin Assifi at your branch for her great effort made in solving an unauthorized transaction problem that happened to my Master card ((#****************） in November 2003remove the 'made' --- for her great effort in solving .....
-spruce(toaster master);
2007-1-19
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"I am writing you to...."
-barefoot(Barefooter);
2007-1-20
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I found my credit rating is incredible lowmy credit rate is incredibly low
-spruce(toaster master);
2007-1-19
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Then I found the only very reason was that I had a few payments past due ranging from June to Auguest of 2005 resulted from my Master Card with BMO, which was actually based on one single $19.95 US dollars transactionI figured it out that it was due to one unpaid BMO Master Card transaction which was happened on ***
-spruce(toaster master);
2007-1-19
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At last one day she (please allow me not to mention her name) picked up the phone, without listening to me for any detail, insisting that the transaction was done by me and I deserved the punishment of being lowered credit rating.don't use SHE. instead, use a lady picked up the phone
-spruce(toaster master);
2007-1-19
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incident had created significant negative immpression in my mind on BMOincident created a very bad image in my mind about BMO
-spruce(toaster master);
2007-1-19
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你的精神很可嘉，我需要好好向你学习to improve my English too.
-spruce(toaster master);
2007-1-19
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信用卡怎么被盗的？说听听，挺怕怕的想提防一下。
-qqhskaren(暗香);
2007-1-26
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